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i've written so many poems
about love and luck and the
unbearable sadness that surfaces
whenever i think about you.

but you isn't a person,
you is a metaphor for the
birds suffocating in the clouds and the
leaves fighting off the wind.

and when i see flowers
all i can think of is death;
because i am a poet,
and my kind of poetry is the
kind that keeps me up all night,
as i memorize the ceiling
and count every minute
until the sun rises.
it’s the kind that makes me
wish for a bridge because then
maybe i could finally be free.

my kind of poetry,
it’s the kind that kills me.
i can't think of a title.
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SweetsAndCharades Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014
You know I'm usually not particularly fond of love poems so I almost stopped reading after the first verse. I am so glad I didn't - this is wonderful!
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014
aw, thank you! :D
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half-pixieman Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013  Student Writer
Sometimes when I find a poem so beautiful and amazing I just don't know what to do I just keep reading it over and over and I can't exit the page for a while because I'm so happy I read something like this haha this is one of those poems, in a major way
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013
oh, thank you so much! i've read those kinds of poems before, and i'm honored to be the creator of one. :)
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013
"but you isn't a person,
you is a metaphor for the
birds suffocating in the clouds and the
leaves fighting off the wind." 

:heart: Struck a cord. Maybe something about surfaces for the title?
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013
ooh, surfaces. i like that. definitely going to think about a title that fits. :)
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
:la: 
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SourAir Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is really intense and powerful; you did an amazing job with this message. :heart:
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013
thank you so much!
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xMotherMoonx Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hello there fellow dA'er! I've featured you in the Spread the LOVE article! Please feel free to fave the journal and share it with your fellow watchers! :heart:
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
thank you very much! i really appreciate it!
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xMotherMoonx Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! :la:
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cality Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very profound and moving. The flow is excellent, too. :heart:
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013
thank you! :heart:
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cality Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. :love:
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Professional Writer
deep and emotional, and speaking for myself, provokes much feeling and thought...
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013
i'm glad my writing left that effect. thank you. :heart:
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Professional Writer
It is my pleasure... :hug:
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creativelycliche Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Professional Writer
This really spoke to me. That second stanza - right to the bone.
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013
thank you. c:
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madameshadowenn Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so incredibly emotive. I particularly like the second stanza.
One little thing - is this line missing a word?
"kind that keeps up all night"
It doesn't quite read right for me :)
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013
oh yeah, fixed that. thank you. :heart:
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madameshadowenn Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome :rose:
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